the morrow

Hovering on a thermal, the black bird surveyed the dusty ruins. For a first sentence, this sounds somewhat primitive--"The [adjective] [noun] [verb] the [adjective] [noun]" structure is something foun

Here's my return for your favor--what turned out to be an insanely long, meticulous review that I wrote at 1:30AM. Enjoy :D he couldn’t muster up the strength to speak ...

Jeffery scowled as he walked down the corridor. He hated the feel of his tight fitting, space station issued jumpsuit. He missed the comfortable bagginess of his earth cargo pants ...

This hasn't received any attention, so I thought I'd revive it. a live Should read "alive." His lifeless corpse was covered in blood, as was her own trembling body. The ...

I lay in the cold, my eyes closed. I refused to open them when I heard shouting. It was too faint for me to hear clearly, still to far away. ...

I don’t want to write. I don’t want to re-write what I just wrote, I don’t want to write anything else. I just don’t want to write. Caution: the following ...

I enjoyed the imagery, and there were a few sentences that resonated well: We would fall in slow motion, at first, and see the beautiful stars and the craggy stone ...

It seems we're both pretty new here. :smt040 Impressions A shadowed, cloaked man stood before a deep, cavernous pit, his head bowed and hands at his side. The first sentence's ...

The flash fiction medium is fine for this piece. I won't say anything about the first sentence...you've already been harped on for that enough :wink: I don't think splitting it ...

Impressions -First paragraph: the first sentence is a little prosaic. It doesn't do much to hook the reader. It's also odd when the detached and omniscient narrator contradicts himself/herself--"it wa